Sinocog- Always a fan of biblical imagery in open mics. You conveyed the personality of the speaker clearly here, but I felt the piece suffered through the repeated phrasing given the length. The choice of vocab and rhyme scheme could've stood to be more sophisticated as well.
Ender- I can definitely relate to the 'attacking my liver' line, lol. A clear, easy to picture narrative that stuck close to your image and told a story which held my attention from start to finish. Good pacing, solid rhyme scheme, straightforward vocab, tight little piece for sure.
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