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Pharaohs Army · 05-03-2020, 01:03 AM

I thought this was Candy's best showing of the season. I.e. LESS abstract & less goofy phrasing.
Some clever wording and an ending that, while cliche, finished the story up nicely.

Inno this appears to be a commentary on human nature and its faults?
There was 1 misspelling and 1 missing word. Not a huge deal but I noticed this in your last week as well. Not gonna dock you for it, but I also didn't like the phrase of "I guess". Because the rest of the verse seemed to be sure of itself. That aside, I do have Candy taking this.
I just didn't "connect" with Inno's verse like I did w/ Candy's and hers connected more w/ the picture.

05-03-2020, 01:03 AM	#10
Pharaohs Army Banned Join Date: Aug 2014 Posts: 2,956 Battle Record: 6 - 14 Rep Power: 0	I thought this was Candy's best showing of the season. I.e. LESS abstract & less goofy phrasing. Some clever wording and an ending that, while cliche, finished the story up nicely. Inno this appears to be a commentary on human nature and its faults? There was 1 misspelling and 1 missing word. Not a huge deal but I noticed this in your last week as well. Not gonna dock you for it, but I also didn't like the phrase of "I guess". Because the rest of the verse seemed to be sure of itself. That aside, I do have Candy taking this. I just didn't "connect" with Inno's verse like I did w/ Candy's and hers connected more w/ the picture. Last edited by Pharaohs Army; 05-03-2020 at 02:50 AM.