[Bodey]

candy- this was really cool dude. i feel like your style is starting to polish here honestly. usually i cant get into it, despite interesting wording. and even though you posted early as usual and probably could've edited more, i still really enjoyed your piece. i like the idea of a guy who cant handle his shit anymore, who obviously thinks too much, and eventually decides to end it all. tragic as that may be, and perhaps an overdone topic, it was an easy fun little read. bibs couldnt catch or latch their ignorance to hush loved that. and the last four lines of your verse were probably my favorite.

inno- you took a more abstract take onto the topic. it was an easy-flowing read, perfect rhythm. you pretty much make a showing of how us humans think we know everything and how we are becoming programmed to be lazy without even realizing it. or at least, that's what i took away. as well written as it is, i didnt find it interesting or personal, despite the writer's voice definitely having a presence.

i'm actually gonna go with candy here, i like it more when people really isolate what they're talking about on more personal terms. thx guys

v/candy