Scar - Reading this was like a fine dining experience lol. I suddenly felt more cultured being amongst these words... like a guest at a fancy restaurant they didn't belong in. It felt odd, awkward, a little infuriating... but I was glad to be there. I think what I'm learning from your pieces Scar, is you're all about the aura of a topic... the ambience. You don't go incredibly deep or break new ground, but your style is so unique it is genuinely intoxicating. I'm still waiting to see your other side though... I want to see Scar unfiltered. I feel like we've got Dr. Hannibal Lecter the cook and opera enthusiast... but I'm waiting for the cannibal to show his face. I want to see you step outside of your comfort zone and really GO IN on a topic... but without losing your unique style. I both dislike and love this verse. One side of me says "fuck this high class bullshit"... the other side says... "this is a legit WRITER at work". The truth is probably somewhere in the middle. But I got to say my man... you are one creative dude with a knack for bringing some much needed, old school ART to this league. Your stuff is intriguing and I'm looking forward to seeing what else you can do with a variety of different topics. As far as this verse though, I would say it's not quite up to par with last weeks, but it was still oozing with style, and I appreciated it for all it's beauty and its flaws... its Scars if you will. Good work here overall with the difficult Gluttony topic.
Inno - First thing I noticed was "they hang from the raptors" and I was like uh oh... he didn't even edit this lol. I'm assuming you meant "rafters" not the dinosaurs... But anyway, this was your typical Inno verse laced with double meanings that sometimes resonated on second glance... and sometimes they didn't. I struggled to see where the Gluttony topic came into play for the better part of this verse... couple mentions here and there. (Maybe some shit went over my head ) Wasn't until the last stanza that you really zeroed in on the topic... then it got good.
"plotting revenge on the chosen
as I’ll make death the last word spoken
the plan is, gates will open
my army furious and steadily growin
to the happy dam nation
swords will thrust for decapitation
brimstone hailed heavens how ironic of a description
the streets fumigated in blood
while water turns to regurgitated mud"
This entire section was fire.
So in my mind you have a great 2nd part and an okay 1st part... (also you had multiple spelling errors in the final line again, which sucked to end it off on)... but this a piece that required multiple readings to really grasp everything for me. It was overall another solid piece from you, Inno.
The tough part is the vote. On one hand we have the super atmospheric Scar piece that brings you into his world masterfully... but just skims the surface of things. On the other hand we have a deeper piece that didn't really focus on the topic directly, more through metaphor, and had a poetic feel to it over the very story driven opposition. This is a tough one... I have to read them both again hold on lol...
I'm going with personal preference... and honestly, as much as I like Inno's super poetic metaphorical style, there's just something about Scar's work that I can't put my finger on. There's something there that keeps me glued to the screen. For that reason...
Vote - Scar
Great battle guys.
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