He / Him / His
Join Date: Oct 2013
Posts: 1,701
Battle Record: 20-1
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It was like a contest to see who’s writtens is worse, the shit got me irked...wow
Took the LLL. But HERE, you would’ve only taken one...and it would’ve been in the first round
wording's effective, concept is cool but doesn't really jump out as something that's out of the box fresh 8/10
A 12 line champ match after 2 rounds?! This should be nothing but obvious, brethren
Compared to NBL that’s a JV league...So, why the FUCK would we call you a Letterman
This is a cool nameflip tied in with the personal, maybe a notch above the previous line, but I think having two bars about him champing a league on another site is kinda overkill, especially when it's not really a humiliating personal. 8/10
Shoot every thread of your shirt ‘til you dead or you hurt...you leavin’ this world open
When I ‘bust at the seams, you getting stretched’...like every piece of your girls clothing
This is ok, I think maybe you could've done something a bit more creative with the "getting stretched" idea. 7/10
Forensics in awe of my knife work...never seen so much amplified neck squirt
I’ll have the cops analyzing Letters Flow...WITHOUT their handwriting expert
This is cool, I think maybe adding some other element to it could've made it stronger but it's decent. 8/10
Multiple guns to ya squad. You wanna hold-heat-like-Cash?...go see the draft
Tua come out the pocket and cause injury concerns...then your whole team’ll pass
This was dope, no complaints. 9/10
Brother spends thousands on caucasian pussy...but puts on an act where he’s mad tough
Wheel of Fortune...’Letter’ll flip for this White bitch’ ‘til this Black Square is Bankrupt
Eh I've seen way too many vanna white bars over the years, and it's a pretty obvious play on the name 'letter'. You put a few more bells and whistles on it, but it just didn't resonate with me. 7/10
You left NC and took RB’s title. But in the NBL...you can’t recover your best days
You’re Gronk...claimed a fake belt, then came back to the league to do nothing but catch fades
Solid personal tied in with a current event, execution is decent. 8/10
55/70 - 78.6%
Beam on the gun. It’ll prove I aint messing w/ this faggot
It’s like sending a text thru MMS - you’ll get the message with the attachment
I've seen similar, but the wording is done well. Not a haymaker, but a solid jab. 7/10
Ur an easy kill. Eagle out.. I’ll have you dead without the effort
& everyone will see that he Israelite, once this bitch gets led out the desert
Israelite has been done before, and while I like the desert/israelite tie in I think execution-wise it has holes in it. Still a good bar though. 8/10
U come from a long line of incest. That’s why imma let the tool lift, scrap
I’ll run in & raise a couple in your home.. but your family should already be used to that
This is unique, and it's worded well. I just don't love leaving out the noun in the set-up part of the punchline. I think it was necessary to make this work, but it just didn't hit with me as a full haymaker. 8/10
We both got entertaining bars, but urs are lies. He could never be me
Cuz I keep the building suspenseful.. & this fraud only keeps them on the edge of deceit
I'm not really feeling this, it feels like it's trying to be flashy with wp but it doesn't really have a point and syntactically it's just weird. 7/10
U thrive off easy wins. So when it comes to being number one, you not
Cuz I’ve checked your stats, & you’ve never had to count on punches with the compubox
I like this. this is creative, worded well, no complaints 9/10
1st I’ll shoot your bitch.. & if you stick around then you get the chrome, son
So that means after the 40 meter, dash.. or else you won’t make it in the long run
Concept's okay. I've seen similar, and the syntax is kinda flawed, which is just something I'm weird about in my preferences 7/10
Funerals are expensive, so it’s a shame that relatives gotta view ur death then
But your family will see cold, hard cash.. cuz they’ll be watching u as the rigamortis sets in
This is an okay closer, I think the wording could've been a bit smoother. 7/10
53/70 - 75.7%
Overall this was a really close battle, and I can see it going either way based on who's voting. I think the one thing that really made the difference in my opinion was wording. Cash had some subtleties that were just more aggressive, and personally, I always consider how the full line is interpreted on both sides of the wordplay. I think letterman had at least two small hiccups that normally wouldn't make a difference in the outcome of a battle, but when a battle is this close, I really have to nitpick over the details to choose a side.
That being said, tua and compubox were both fire and lotb for me. Hats off to both for a great showing
MVGT - Cash
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