Wander for too long & get checked for bread.
God! Son. You've battled life but this week? Dead like Fred.
dudes body's still warm but hey who am I to judge. Bar is alright, thought this could've been better in execution
It might get harry when none of your bars get mentioned.
school you, I'm taking wand out like a Hogwarts Suspension.
this is okay, I know wand bars have been done before and I didn't think this was a particularly creative flip
I'm disfiguring you & your fat bae with an ax blade
Ice hatchets to y'all face, catching these picks like it's Draft Day.
this is cool, maybe could've been worded with a bit more aggression
Slecht gets busy. I'll release the piece in a jiffy if need be.
got keys that'll cover wander, without impersonating Stevie.
eh wonder/wander is a little bit of a stretch but i'll let it slide, this is okay
Try to alter my state of being and I might go off quick,
giving Wander an out of body experience, no Pyschonautics
ok closer
Man lockdown got me noticing everything u pen’s fuckin lame
Bars so rushed & unfinished they put quarantine hair cuts to shame
lol this is an okay opener, it's funny so i dig it
Archaeological concepts! That mean they’re dated and light
Get skinned by the blade at night... That brush with the metal uncover ur bones like excavation sites
this was fire tbh, arguably my favorite bar I've read so far this week
U can’t please a crowd so I’ll help, for this reason I keep the stowed nina
The slide moves & everyone watch that shit pour out ur mouth, keynote speaker
eh im not sold on the wording on this, but I like the idea.
Tryna’ camp out like he can defend.. the blade mean ur meeting ur end
Roll up on ur base with that sharp edge like I was sharing pizza with friends
nah im not really feeling this, the connection between the concepts just feels too weak and im not sure if this is supposed to read comedically but the wording is in that line between aggressive and funny where it just doesnt stand out
Probs get harassed by teens on ur block, just die. The silenced tools’ll do
When it ring cops don’t pay attention but this time ain’t kids prank calling u
the rhyming here is kinda sloppy, and the concept here just doesn't really have much foundation
So wanderer I think started out pretty well and kinda fell off toward the end. He had higher highs and lower lows while slecht kinda stayed at the same level throughout the battle. It's a bit tough to vote on imo, I think if this was a longer battle slecht could've possibly edged this with consistency, but the excavation bar was definitely lotb imo with my second favorite being a tie between ice picks and quarantine haircuts and the keynote speaker bar at #3. Then there's probably a run of slecht's bars, followed by wanderer's last 2.
but overall I gotta give this to wanderer for a stronger showing
Last edited by Answer; 04-25-2020 at 02:38 PM.
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