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Old 04-24-2020, 02:55 PM   #10
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Didn't really catch the topic in either verse they both seemed a bit random. Which is expected from Sinacog, i think Candy just followed suit and keyed up a quick response to claim his win. I liked Candy's rhyme schemes quite a bit, the multies made the flow connect well and kept it fun to read but to me the narrative wasn't super compelling. Had some decent stuff sprinkled throughout and the whole "spirits of his last meal" thing was cool to me, i don't know there was a little bit of okay imagery but you can tell the lack of effort on Candy's part and Sinacog refusing to heed any actual advice and keep writing the same stuff he has been on the other side.

V/Candy verse was better and a little more relevant to the topic
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