this was an outstanding battle. I knew putting you 2 together would produce some dope shit. blue man this piece was well written and thoughtful. it never stumbled and the flow of your words made the progression of the story come easy. gonna be honest I thought when she gave you a second chance the story would end with her cheating on you and you some how getting retribution. but you didn't do that which I thought was brave, you didn't let your character escape his punishment. well done broski.
bodey this was some dope story telling. bursting from the seams with radiant emotion and passion if I'm being completely honest. I enjoyed how you described what made you fall for her in the first stanza. the switch in how you felt about her was well written and helped the story flesh out. honestly I loved the passion you had in this one, seems like it written from a personal perspective which adds to the value of the piece for me.
this was a tough one. they both dropped great pieces and its toss up if could I vote a draw but I gotta with bodey by slight margin. slight!
BOTW!!
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