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Ender shit as soon as i hit the post button it said thread not accepting new posts lulz. turned out it was locked and is in the archive now. but i did copy and pasted my review of your verse so i guess i'll post it here
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Ender this is great. its too bad that your opponent noshowed but it would have taken a lot to beat this verse my man. i think this may be my favorite verse of the round. between this and deadman's verse. i like the style here. it started and ended the same which is something i'm always intrigue by lulz. the pacing was perfect as everything seem to progress naturally and smoothly. dialogue was great also. it was also cool how the plot of the story dictated the physical trait of it. when he found the note, you can tell his whole world crumbled and it was reflected by the melting of colors around him. i found maybe one instance of questionable wording like "all contrite". unless i'm reading it wrong i dont know. but yes, this was some quality written my man
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