[Bodey]

Clut- loved your approach on this. definitely kept me engaged. it reminded me of a father educating his son but also poking fun at it, sarcastic in areas which i enjoyed. if i were to look at this from a deeper angle, it's almost like he's saying chase your dreams but be prepared for setbacks and be prepared in general. maybe not, but that's my take on it. also, the narrator says he doesnt care for danger if it's at his son's expense. maybe i read into that incorrectly, but then i started to think does he want his son to leave or was that just another metaphor for encouraging him to take chances, and to learn how to fail. i like pieces like this bc they're thought provoking so thank you for that

Adverse- descriptive af as usual. the imagery here is impressive, that whole first paragraph was beautifully written. i was actually gonna quote that "gluttonous" bar but someone beat me to it. i do wish you'd elaborated a little more on the dynamics of the characters, you focused more on the imagery surrounding rather than the imagery within, if that makes sense.

this sucks bc this is yet another battle i dont want to vote on. solid verses from you both, and completely different styles and story. but Clut's verse kept me more in tune, and read a little easier for me to be honest. just found it more interesting from a narrator standpoint and technicality within the verse. am i allowed to call a draw though? someone already said it, that this comes down to personal preference. both verses were well written and portrayed the picture creatively. but again, i have to give it to Clut for having a more condensed story. enjoyed both, guys. thanks

V/ Clut