[Bodey]

ugh, jesus christ. a lot of close verses in this round man, this is the second one i've been like damn, i dont even wanna vote. too talented for your own goods

Uni- this verse from you surprised me, i didn't see it going that direction, and i even combed the piece over hoping this brother wasnt blood-related, as if that would justify the maliciousness of his actions. My reactions vary cuz I'm afraid of nothing, and that scares me very good. i liked that this told a pretty direct story, there was no room for really questioning what was going on. i do wish you put more showing-description into your piece. like instead of just saying he outright raped her, describe his actions so the reader could picture it, because that was a significant shock value to the whole piece. but i like morbid shit, and you took it to another level here.

dead man- you've always had a fantastic history of really outlining details and putting a picture to your pieces. i havent had that much nostalgia in a long time, shit had me on memory lane for a second, and i liked the relatable content. you've always been a master of straight-forward portrayal on anything you write, and it's the main reason the reader can stay so engaged throughout.

my dilemma is that i liked dead man's writing better, and found his style more creative. but Uni's story was more creative. which is why i think he EDGED this, on sheer principle that he took this picture to a more imaginative direction. ugh, i hate myself for having to make a choice but

v/ Univ