brokenhal0
Your piece had a beautiful flow to it, and there was also a lot of interesting vocabulary and imagery used. For me though, it was difficult to get my head around exactly what you were trying to say, other than a general theme of nature being contaminated with a religious twist to it. In my opinion, topicals always sit somewhere on the spectrum between a story and a poem, and the more extreme you go in either direction, the more you lose voters who favour the other side of the spectrum. I favour storytelling more myself, so while this was a piece that showed a lot of technical skill, I couldn't really connect with it. Nice writing though.
Objective
This piece tackles a similar theme to brokenhal0's (given the topic for this battle I'm not surprised) but I found it to be more accessible. It tackled the damage we are doing to our planet through the lens of a toxic relationship. The piece approached this in a poetic way, rather than a story-driven way, but still hit the main beats of the beginning and eventual decline of the realtionship. For me the strengths of this piece could be found in the impact of some of the individual lines. The lines about 'mountains move strands of her hair' and the closing line 'they both continue to poison the people they meet' really resonated with me. Nice piece of writing.
Inno
This piece, while still clearly being what I would call poetry, was the most story-driven of all three pieces. The story and characters (being man and nature) were well developed, with nice little details to help me connect to the piece. I liked that you spent the first stanza recounting the good times, and nature was depicted as forgiving rather than vengeful. I also liked that man was portrayed as weak and thoughtless rather than malicious. But what really made the piece memorable was the wording and flow. Your multis worked in such a satisfying and natural way. I thought this was a strong piece.
I thought all three of you dropped solid pieces of writing. All three leaned into a poetic style, relying on flow, rhyme and imagery. I felt like Inno executed this best, while also having the strongest story, which is why he gets my vote.
Vote - Inno
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