Sinacog
This was actually kind of hypnotic. Seemed like a mix between a topical and a rap. The style you've used isn't the style that's currently in vogue, so it will be difficult to win dropping verses like this. Also, writing in your word flips with slashes like 'whine/wine' or 'sistine/sixteen' takes away from them. You have to trust the reader to get the flip without holding their hand. If they miss it, they miss it. Too much bragging, too little attacking FGR. But I thought it was a fun read. Nice to read something a little different.
FGR
I get $$$$ n ball hard. you will always live on a budget
Sin couldn't make big figures in front of a lamp doing shadow puppts
Sinacog didn't have any actual punches. The closest he came was wine/whine. I liked the bar I quoted from FGR. FGR had good concepts, but the wording was a little off. Like the first bar; it only works if you read it as dropping 'a rack it's' all over. If you try and read it the other way, like literally dropping rackets on tennis courts, it doesn't work because you said 'a rackets' and you can't use an indefinite article on a plural noun. Probably an unnecessary amount of detail to go into here on a clear FGR win, but that's why I only quoted one bar, even though the concepts were decent.
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