As has already been stated, this was an amazing battle. I wrote this one off in predictions in this week's mag, after Blue's troll of Universe last week and his rescinded verse against NYC I thought he was finding elaborate ways to troll us. But man like i said i knew you could write something totally dope topical wise if you just got to it, this was fantastic! I liked how your topic mirrored the picture all the way down to the "you tried hard you tried so fucking hard" your narrative was great, and you had some awesome imagery and some great one liners
"it was during this time you were something of a martyr to me
id learn tho, glimmers of hope observed in the moonlight are harder to see
it was back to long nights at those tragic dive bars
amnesia towards life’s lessons. old habits die hard
not a sprint it was a tumble down the path that tempts me
the straw had broke the camel’s back inside a glass half empty"
"dark were my thoughts and every day that followed pestered
the bulbs wilting away on the table was fitting for a hollow gesture"
Stuff like that just gets me in a topical bout, just great emotion and what not throughout. Your flow on here was impeccable you were effortless transiting from one line to another, it was nothing to you. I loved the way your story progressed it was paced well and honestly Blue you surprised me here and i was thinking that you might win off that alone
BUTTTT
Then comes Ms. Bodey who up to this point has given us half baked verses in this league that had a lot of potential and maybe a lot of amazing content as well but never really manifested as a "complete" narrative. You can tell that she took her time here and really poured her heart into this one. I loved how we saw this relationship progress from the puppy love stage to kind of stagnancy to the breaking point, it really resonates when you've been in a relationship like that. I think in that way your verses are sort of like dead man's because they usually hit that nostalgic vein, you really know how to keep your reader's attention and hit them things that they can feel as well as see.
"Until then, I didn’t know that you could actually sob yourself nauseous
Which is ironic, since this girl used to make herself vomit
As if it made any difference to her waistline before wallowing til dawn
As if she could regurgitate the self-hatred she swallows all day long
People try to tell me that she’s just a sick person who needs a lot of help
But the truth is, she’s a terrible fucking person.
And I hope she never forgives herself"
I loved this conclusion. There was so much emotion in it all the way to last word. Those last two lines were stupid good in my opinion, just liked the fact you weren't going to let her disorder justify the fact that she's a totally shitty person in general. Really really good piece proud of you this week kid!
This is definitely battle of the week thus far in my eyes. So much to be said for both sides and i could easily play the tie card and leave with a clear conscious but unfortunately somebody has to lose. Blue really blew me away, i was not expecting such a great verse but Bodey also blew me away, I've been well aware of what she is capable of for awhile but I've been waiting all season for something like this, it's really close guys but
V/Bodey
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