MMLP - The writing was good. The rhyming was a highlight in some places. The twist wasn't really a 'gotcha!' moment but had some kind of typical impact for the Candyman horror genre. The wording, bludgeoning, and harassment, didn't feel accurate for that passage of the story. It was a bit risky ending on a phrase like "the rest is history." I didn't feel like Candyman as a folklore item had its time to shine. It was the destination of the story, but not the 'soul' of the story, suggesting you were short on time or went for something more quick and sharp.
Scar - THis was interesting. A woman having a dialogue of herself while mourning a lost partner? I'm not familiar with Virginia Woolf's life story. It provided some intrigue as there's not much insight into the relationship of Leonard and Virginia. Felt like the verse could've been at least twice as long to give more on the story. Didn't realy feel like a complete package.
I'm voting for Scar because the verse had some more 'life' to it and created characters who spoke and were revealing something.
Thanks for the reads guys, I don't mean to be overly critical, just how I saw things.
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