Clutbuck
So I'm impressed by the way this was executed. And I am a bit biased because I also like to take the literal route sometimes with a pic and get technical. (I can't do it like this, but, you knowwhatimean)
Flowed well and good technical aspects of the rhyming.
Read Clutbuck's first and knew it would take a great great verse to top it, just because I enjoyed the angle.
Couldn't help but read the votes before this and I agree that waste fuel/ space suit is a bit of a stretch. I'll ding you for it but not too heavily
Adverse
Also flowed well and good rhyming.
This sucks cuz against most other verses you'd probably win easily. I hate to say it but it truly comes down to "personal preference".
Really enjoyed the end of your first stanza, both technically and content-wise.
Quote:
Originally Posted by Adverse
Conniving kind of creatures, masters of infiltration and fronts
Friendly faces that'll be picking our teeth with the bones of your civilization in months
Gluttonous by nature, no one is spared in our way
Repainting lush forest greenery the browns and greys of barren decay
Carnivorous scavengers, surgically picking every piece from the corpses
Leave into orbit, find our next home, ping in the coordinates
Rinse and repeat, it's been decades of singing this chorus
I hardly think about the desolation we were causing, there was no reason before this..
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dope
But not enough to take it here, sorry. Just liked Clut's better as a whole and the smartass angle.
V Clutbuck