Netcees - View Single Post - WEEK 4: MMLP vs Scar - 5-2 SCAR WINS

Universe · 04-16-2020, 03:56 PM

Interesting contrast of styles here... let's break it down.

MMLP - Alright I knew there was a twist coming and I got one again. It didn't quite have the impact as your last two weeks though. I know OF Candyman, but if it wasnt for that new Jordan Peele produced trailer this wouldn''t have been effective at all for me. But again, that's just personal preference. I'm beginning to see the technical deficiencies Adverse has been talking about as well... multi's lacking, some awkward phrasing. I've been blind to them over the last 2 weeks because of how impactful your stories were, but they unfortunately glared brightly here. I still enjoyed this piece, MMLP, your style is one of a kind and you definitely have a niche in this topical world, but this was just a stumble to me. Not bad, just didn't really stand out. I'm still a fan though bro... keep the twists coming.

Scar - Wow... okay. A LOT to digest here. Aesthetically this is another amazing piece of art from you... the time you put into these pieces is insane and the presentation is something to behold. The problem with this particular verse is it's so abstract and is about an author that many people have MAYBE heard of (Virginia Woolfe aka Adeline), but probably haven't had any experience with. I myself had to read this three times to digest everything (and I'm an English major). A Room of One's Own is a famous essay by V.W. but I highly doubt people at netcees will know about it lol. Anyway, this only requires a personal opinion so let's continue... I really liked the play on the title, "The Girl Who Cried..." really hits home after you finish and know what and who it's about. But... maybe I'm a bit rusty but I failed to really see the correlation between the picture and the topic though.. I mean, I see the intention but I had to REALLY look into this quite deep to understand everything. (Maybe you can PM me about your thought process behind this as I AM interested..) I know V.W. drowned herself, and looking at the pic again, it does resemble maybe a bloated blue corpse, if that's what you were going for... I can see that now, actually. I don't know, I think I'm sort of in love with this piece lol.

So, I gotta go with what resonates with me the most. MMLP's verse was like a short little thriller against Scar's long, carefully crafted drama... I can see other people going for the thriller but for me... I appreciate the time it takes to accomplish what Scar did the most. It's just so polarizing.

Vote - Scar

04-16-2020, 03:56 PM	#6
Universe Everything's Connected Join Date: Nov 2017 Location: Niagara Falls, Canada Posts: 1,001 Battle Record: 19-8 Champed - Guerrilla Writing League(2x) - GWL Picture challenge(2x) - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 10178706	Interesting contrast of styles here... let's break it down. MMLP - Alright I knew there was a twist coming and I got one again. It didn't quite have the impact as your last two weeks though. I know OF Candyman, but if it wasnt for that new Jordan Peele produced trailer this wouldn''t have been effective at all for me. But again, that's just personal preference. I'm beginning to see the technical deficiencies Adverse has been talking about as well... multi's lacking, some awkward phrasing. I've been blind to them over the last 2 weeks because of how impactful your stories were, but they unfortunately glared brightly here. I still enjoyed this piece, MMLP, your style is one of a kind and you definitely have a niche in this topical world, but this was just a stumble to me. Not bad, just didn't really stand out. I'm still a fan though bro... keep the twists coming. Scar - Wow... okay. A LOT to digest here. Aesthetically this is another amazing piece of art from you... the time you put into these pieces is insane and the presentation is something to behold. The problem with this particular verse is it's so abstract and is about an author that many people have MAYBE heard of (Virginia Woolfe aka Adeline), but probably haven't had any experience with. I myself had to read this three times to digest everything (and I'm an English major). A Room of One's Own is a famous essay by V.W. but I highly doubt people at netcees will know about it lol. Anyway, this only requires a personal opinion so let's continue... I really liked the play on the title, "The Girl Who Cried..." really hits home after you finish and know what and who it's about. But... maybe I'm a bit rusty but I failed to really see the correlation between the picture and the topic though.. I mean, I see the intention but I had to REALLY look into this quite deep to understand everything. (Maybe you can PM me about your thought process behind this as I AM interested..) I know V.W. drowned herself, and looking at the pic again, it does resemble maybe a bloated blue corpse, if that's what you were going for... I can see that now, actually. I don't know, I think I'm sort of in love with this piece lol. So, I gotta go with what resonates with me the most. MMLP's verse was like a short little thriller against Scar's long, carefully crafted drama... I can see other people going for the thriller but for me... I appreciate the time it takes to accomplish what Scar did the most. It's just so polarizing. Vote - Scar __________________ ..Passed the Present and Future..