[MMLP]

Clut - negs out the way first, it felt too wordy at times, it must be deliberate becuz u want me to realise I'm wrong in a way or just u being stubbourn, it's like your challenging the reader to appreciate your techincal aspect, once its grasped, it flows alot better on second read tbf.

It felt real rushed tbh but it was executed fine technically) I suppose (story is dope, well get to that).

Space suit, waste fuel is forced af in my accent, sorry bro. But I can see it working with most

Fook me,

I don’t know how the fook u came up with this to that topic/ pic, I stared at it for ages and drew a blank. You went to town on this one and fully immersed yourself in what was on display. The breakdown of why it might be theoretically possible, (but highly improbable lmao) is where this really shines, from the perspective of a "so called" naive youngster. Its you on top form when storytelling, being the narrator etc, really draws u in, leaves u hanging on the next line.

I cant vouch for the technical scientific numbers you stated, knowing you, they will be true but I ain't gonna pretend I know innit, cba to look it up either. To those accuracies behind what it would take to achieve it, are handled well and you strike a good balance between the serious n comedic as ever. I think part of the reason I enjoyed it so much is that I would never have thought to approach it this way myself. Creative af
u better come out for a beer next time I ask mf, especially if adverse fucks this up n I'm forced to vote for ya. Good read, sick spin





Adverse - negs- this felt as rushed as barons tbh, the lines were long man, wasnt enough going on in them for me to stay super engaged u know (first section only) hard for a simpleton like me to get into, it may appear same line lengths as barons but theres much more going on to not appreciate them more.

Loses momentum in my humble opinion, and that's all it is

that being said the second part gave this piece the substance it needed, felt like u went too long creating a nice lustrous piece in poetry and imagery n all that, a lot of it didn't need to be there
Totally appreciated what and why u went with the 'twist'

I liked to be surprised, ahh the first part was ok but it lost me for a bit, too many lines dragged on a little, ultimately going off topic

I hate that u both posted early, and ultimately i feel its hurt u more. Neither was probs THAT champ match level, both great spins on the topic but piece didn't have me as engaged throughout as barons, that's what comes down to more than anything



Vote - Clut