Universe - Liked your premise and the imagery was there as it always is but i feel like your narrative fell a little flat, it just didn't feel as connected as it usually did, it wasn't a terrible story it just seemed choppy and not given the Universe treatment you usually give it? I don't know just my opinion bro, but i liked you linking abortion to a desolate world, sort of like purgatory i suppose? (Which was the theme of my piece this week as well) overall liked the story, and i think if you took it a little more serious I'd be blown away as per usual but again i believe you didn't think you had to be on your A game this week.
Blue - LOL I'm always impressed by your wordplay brother, i was hoping we'd get to see you at least attempt a topical, honestly think you can do it as you're a skilled writer. It's fine though this was entertaining but as for this being a topical league, i don't even feel like feeding this as it had nothing to do with the concept or had any kind of topical nature to it. So yeah
V/Uni
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