I read this earlier in the week, and again just now
what makes this piece different is the way you wrote it
the way each section is branched off to work with the section its in
I feel as though that you really tapped into what you wanted to
which is great, if this was a lot more cohesive I would say more
but for the most part a majority of this is nice in thought...
keep writing
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