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Pharaohs Army · 03-16-2020, 08:53 PM

I've read both multiple times. Really tough one to vote on here fellas.

Adverse:
Your first verse is top notch. Really liking it.
I don't know specifically what makes the 2nd verse seem like a dropoff for me. It's just not as good as the first, technically or narrative-wise. A couple lazy lines.
I gather that the piece is about omnipotence? And breaking free of it.

MMLP:
Humans pushing the limit, machines eventually taking over. Heard this theme 100X from the matrix to other sci-fi venues. But you did it with technical prowess. Read aloud, your verse flows very well with good multis and rhythm. Your narrative was not as compelling as Adverse. But your craftsmanship showed out. There isn't a ton of meat on the bones though. A very simple story
Attempting to climb as high as expected
ascending, they’d rise in the strive for perfection
dope couplet technically but it's not really saying much?

Adverse's first verse is also very good technically. So the question for me is can Adverse's great first verse eclipse a tired themed but technical splendor of MMLP?

I won't lower the voting bar to a coinflip, but it's really that close for me.
I just "got more" out of adverse's piece, particularly the first half. So I'm edging it to V Adverse

This is the 2nd time I've voted against a good technical MMLP verse, and it doesn't feel good, so he's due. I guess my advice would be spice it up a bit.

03-16-2020, 08:53 PM	#10
Pharaohs Army Banned Join Date: Aug 2014 Posts: 2,956 Battle Record: 6 - 14 Rep Power: 0	I've read both multiple times. Really tough one to vote on here fellas. Adverse: Your first verse is top notch. Really liking it. I don't know specifically what makes the 2nd verse seem like a dropoff for me. It's just not as good as the first, technically or narrative-wise. A couple lazy lines. I gather that the piece is about omnipotence? And breaking free of it. MMLP: Humans pushing the limit, machines eventually taking over. Heard this theme 100X from the matrix to other sci-fi venues. But you did it with technical prowess. Read aloud, your verse flows very well with good multis and rhythm. Your narrative was not as compelling as Adverse. But your craftsmanship showed out. There isn't a ton of meat on the bones though. A very simple story Attempting to climb as high as expected ascending, they’d rise in the strive for perfection dope couplet technically but it's not really saying much? Adverse's first verse is also very good technically. So the question for me is can Adverse's great first verse eclipse a tired themed but technical splendor of MMLP? I won't lower the voting bar to a coinflip, but it's really that close for me. I just "got more" out of adverse's piece, particularly the first half. So I'm edging it to V Adverse This is the 2nd time I've voted against a good technical MMLP verse, and it doesn't feel good, so he's due. I guess my advice would be spice it up a bit.