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Ouch since this battle was a disqualification and Pinot knew he didn't need to show as he already had the W.... I figured you should at least get some feedback on your work as a writer;
So.....it's a decent enough bar for a Kobe concept, my main issues are it's pretty flat wording wise and not overly creative....the bigger issue is it basically reads as a pure swag and flow bar, there's no threat to your opponent at all ... You need to bring his name up or something in the setup to illustrate he's the target and accurately word an attack line.... As it stands now you're more likely to be opening fire on a Birch Tree then on wine man
Lastly, you're at an extreme disadvantage this week because unfortunately someone else dropped a WAY more fire Kobe bar... No fault of yours, but in hindsight it just puts a huge black cloud over your bar knowing it was clearly one-upped in spectacular fashion
"May the wind always be at your back and the sun upon your face. And may the wings of destiny carry you aloft to dance with the stars."