cashius.. if you want constructive criticism your lines were slightly confusing and all the build up with the quotes before that ehh... it didn't fully connect to me
and next
Habitat --- your bar hand kind of a better flow and feel to it, but I felt like there is no punchline.. it flowed and was ok but.. no zing to it nah mean. It wasn't bad or anything just seemed pretty run of the mill generic.
vote - Cashius --- because I liked it slightly better
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