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Inno yes sir it makes perfect sense to me, it's a reasonable critique i have also grown tired of love stories and what not as well. I had a dream about a girl named "Anna" i don't remember too many of my dreams but this one was vivid. I remembered her face and name and woke up with with a heart ache, a longing for a woman I'd never met. I've done most love topics to death as well and It's grown tiresome to me too lol
As for the poetry thing, yeah i do write poems and i stylized this more as a freewritten poem than a traditional rap verse. I love how fluid poetry is and putting together vivid scenes and what not. Sometimes i feel confined by having to rhyme every line and like i can't build the world that i want to.
I'm glad you liked the writing and i appreciate the honest critique, i will take it into consideration and overstep nore boundaries in my next piece