Kinda the same thing blue said with respect to sinacog's bar, the denial wp is one of those things that anyone who's been doing this as long as sinacog has knows not to do. The couldnt make the cut/katana thing was too simple, and the using the word cut twice in "make the cut" and "cutting edge" comes off as sloppy and redundant. Even the rhymes you chose for this are pretty rudimentary, so the whole thing feels really phoned in
Adverse: the extension blast him/ten commandments rhyme could've been cleaner. I like the overall idea for the punch, but the execution could've been a bit better. I think small things like the word "that" can slow your momentum down, and you might've been able to add another layer on. But overall this was a cool bar
mvgt - adverse
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