[PancakeBrah]

"I like to breathe through this pencil's glands
Ben's a monster, vitriolic. Took a trip in and went and got it
Dirfting to symbiotic
Upon each limb's a goblin"

That's the good stuff.

"I'll make a fan of your bones"

"It's thine favorite.. jungle fever. Rapunzel weaver
Chase it with a cup of ether"

"Thine" was nuts, in the context of the slang and gritty tone. Both lines are so evocative. Great.

"Time stops for minutes"

That's great. Purposely understated to underline the point, and maybe a bit sarcastic/satirical.

The ending was good.

I think this was a great piece. From 'castles in grain' to 'conjugal visits' felt a bit forced, or just adding on. But the genius strokes of phrasing and personality throughout made it such a fun """"read"""". Enjoyed it.