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Originally Posted by Universe

Plus I made beef feel like it could maybe heal
The stakes are real but I pre-fur cajun-meals like baby veal

Nice wordplay, pretty creative

They say the hills have eyes but until grass dies
I will fertilize mine and rebuild them blind
Now I can seize the day on any given night
Sometimes you have to be dead wrong to make sure you're living right
Heed advice, most agree I'm not Jesus Christ
But I approach every post like it's my last, believe what you like

I like this whole part^

Thinking I bite ain't awful news it's a compliment dude
You got the proof? Shoot me a link in here like John Wilks Booth
A tortured youth, the first-person-shooting playing Borderlands 2
Reef-fining my methods like the coast guard, I've got no coral with you
Now laymen say, "That's not how you pronounce quarrel you goof"
All the while I just smile and say, "according to who?"
You claim orange is the new black but I doubt I'm that racist
I bet you made Neo not-see-ties like agents outside the matrix

This part I like too. Very creative, refreshing stuff^

Planned to expose genealogy sites when blood lines appeared

Really like this line^


Taunting agents like Keith Jesperson, every letter has a statement
Draw a Happy Face in :)... with Patrick Bateman's imagination
I'm like Dahmer or Ed Gein, a cannibal with a can of red bull
Charles Manson near a starlets mansion, just another phantom thread pulled
And I've come unravelled, guess I should've told you that earlier
This is the end of the serial killer and the start of the mass murderer...[/I]

Liked this whole part^

I got a riddle; How do you have a dad bod without a father figure?[/I]
You thought a criminal mind was original? I believe it never was...
But a chain of evidence can restrain even the best of us

Liked these lines^

All the signs were there, it's not my fault you chose to ignore them
But how can you be behind my bars if you never spoke to the warden?
All that's alive is the rhymes, and I'm a make you postmortem

Nice^

Really enjoyed this read, very creative. Liked the whole evolution of the entire piece