Rawn M.D.

dope drop oats...

read fluidly all the way thru
and had aspects of truth and insight wrappped within a dope lil story...
i enjoyed the read man.

i do agree with some of what Lars said, but some I don't ie i liked the nasseous/nervous gave u a feel of the character, plus the aliteration of the words worked nicely...but sometimes rhymes could b a tad bit polished...but like u said a bit of rust..i got the same thing going on.