[Witty]

Ok, I don't like the topic. It lends itself to cliché and nothing original jumps out from it to me. No shot at Adonis I'm just saying. In the end we had two verses which were very similar in their theme because really they didn't have too many options to go with. Blue had a verse about how war is bad, as did pharaoh, but with characters. Don't get me wrong I did like both verses but the subject matter was just slightly underwhelming but I don't blame either writer for that. Blue your verse was very well written leaving aside a few grammatical errors, it was crisp and concise and some of the rhyming was very impressive, you have a way with wording lines that really gets the full potential out of the idea which probably comes from being a text battler. As I said previously the idea has been done a whole bunch of times but the technical proficiency made it a fun read nonetheless. Pharaoh I liked your verse, it was very easy to follow...it felt forced in terms of wording in certain places and I think you made a misstep in naming the characters as it suggested you were going to get more indepth with the character development and then just didn't, but the story was well told and easily followed. Maybe more of a twist at the end would have been nice instead of one guy dying as I was expecting, but a solid story.

Giving it to Blue for the more enjoyable read.