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Originally Posted by Aero
After reading Adonis verse I said say no more but then I saw Objective getting the most votes for worst verse so I said lemme check it out. Objective had the worst verse of the round.
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I agree. It was too cluttered and should have been polished thoroughly, a story driven topical wins over that unless I had executed it better. As it stands now it's a bit all over to place to say the least, haha. I still don't regret my decision for going for it, I'll keep doing similar stuff like this and take feedback to heart until I get it right.
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