Thought it was cool but only after like 1/3-1/2 of the verse in. It started slow then picked up here:
A spark from the bic, a zippo, or a flick of the match
And ill smoke a whole pack, whats more delicious than that?
Its nothin like the taste of cigs, after sex with a bitch..
Except for being turned down, cause your breath is like shit!
Also enjoyed this couplet:
It basically sucks, filter hangin from your face and ur drunk
Cant even run away from it, to much strain on your lungs
But ye, thought the first part was rather meh and then it picked up from then and all the way to the end. Solid piece overall tho, good read. Keep writing.
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So deep into writing I'm concerned bout the text on my grave.
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