i'll shoot a text to ya hood, let ya homies know u'll be dead in seconds
no iphone, i'll put an aero through this square just to spread the message
The first thing is I'm not sure why you wrote "aero" instead of "arrow" since I don't really see any tie-in to aero. But also, I think you could've made it a little more concrete that you're talking about the "share" icon with some kind of reference to it in the set-up. Either way this is a cool concept that I felt landed, but I think it could've been a bit stronger if it work reworked.
sweet talk ya slut, if the balls in my court she'll be slurpin on some cock
irony at its finest, im the rebound guy that'll have the bitch posted on the block
this is cool, no real complaints.
make a choice, shootout or bare knuckle? step & im boxing u off a whim
if he chooses the gun overhand, its cuz he's tired of catching them on the chin
something about this is just recursive and the slingshot method wouldn't cause you to "catch anything on the chin". i think the wording could've been better
i've got a tag team that'll shake the Net, give a call & im sprayin this clown
this aint free agency, but for the right contract i'll bring both the K's to ya town
i like the overall idea here, it would be cool but my biggest hand-up is that nobody would rightfully call Kevin Durant or Kyrie Irving "K" for short. Just kinda something you made up yourself to make the wp work
tittie fk ya broad w/ the gat, if i unload watch her chest get dimished
quit w/ the gimmicks, i'll 'torch her' rack & break her back like a Lex Luger finish
this was cool, I dig the old school wrestling bars but I wouldn't refer to tittie fucking someone with a gun as "torching" her, so that's kinda weird
overall solid verse, just a few things I thought could use fine tuning
Last edited by Answer; 07-13-2019 at 08:47 AM.
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