Veritas - the bury line worked for the set up, but it was worded a little odd to me. But a little inner momentarily/going to bury was good. I feel like it should've worked into with pet cemetary the same but it was a good punch still. RIP you like zombie honey badgers was pretty good concept work. Overall a good opening bar.
Ok super punch out I haven't played since a kid, so I'm not very familiar with what select does, but I'll assume it opens a character menu for tyson. More like a swag punch I guess and select/deck makes pretty solid. I dont know about Allen knights group. I read it with an inner of do/group around inner of chump/gassed up.so it I could drop tyson imagine what I could do to you.
A muay thai clinch is your hand in hand around the neck. Pretty cool. Ufc bars, I like it. Jon Jones gonna win tomorrow. Then you went mind to mind. I liked the breakdown concept with mind/body. Then to break down the mind to not be matter or space in time. It's not typical punch set up thing but I'm not a typical battle voter I know my shit and that was a nice bar. It flowed good and dint need inners or wordplays and still was dope which makes it doper to me.
Next, your inner lead is good, so hes microscopic to you, and garbage, and you'll crush him. Cool. The you ain't sick follow up was pretty good. If you would've said alias swine it could've been a 3 little pigs and you could've been the big bad wolf.
I'm gonna be honest, I didn't really enjoy the last bar a whole lot. It's ok but the shallowing/level and battling battle to transcend was a good concept and it was tied together but that's about it. Kind of sensei vibe and I like the idea of it otherwise.
Overall solid.
Chamber - so opening bar was pretty good. The picking up cases was good shells/charges. 69 use was cool. Overall the opening line could've been a little better set up, but maybe I'm missing something because I'm not very familiar with the specifics of his crew or the whole story. Decent punch though.
You know what rhymes with spoiler alert? This boy is a jerk.
Anyway I liked the way you had a flow to toy with the words.
Scared should be scarred, btw. Some people would act like you're dumb cuz they're dumb or just act like your dumb cuz they feel like it. But hey I get it. Anyway the a avenger reference wasn't bad but overall these two lines were great flow with decent punch but could've been a little more I think.
I assume its goonies, tied with kid bastard and punk. Decent concept set up I'd say. But that keebler elf cracker line idk. Cracker in a trunk decent multi but the punch pretty weak
So the variable I'm just gonna assume is veri' bullshitting which would make a good name flip imo. Variables vary go up and down. And the set up alluded to that very concept so far I'd say the most solid bar this drop.
The last bar didn't have a whole lot for me. Vneck was ok.
Overall decent.
Vote - veritas
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