[Adonis]

battle of the Alias??

Soul - I only read once so far, but I have to say it's pretty choppy bro. Some lines/bars flow is dope, then some are what ever the opposite of 'dope' is. Maybe second read will change my mind on that front...Yeah, I think it's because of line length here. Anyways, it stayed a bit choppy, wordy (extremely) and enjoyable. I, for the life of me, can not tie it to the topic which is a bit of a bother for me, but W/E. I loved the attention to detail as far as word choice, that was by far the most enjoyable thing here. Also, never heard "Prorum" before, tried looking it up...Nothing, Google searched, dope meaning. Love Latin, and wish I was born in it's age. All in all, a verse about revenge obviously. I took it as man vs. Machine, and the man (he was possibly a machine as well but doubtful) ends up fighting in back allies for a living. Forever killing the things that killed his friend. Nice concept, but not made for this topic IMO. The only way I can link the two is if this were literally a dream, but not even that ties in until the final couplet in which you talk about going to bed angry. I guess, in the end I'm not the biggest fan of this drop. I loved the word choice, and I think everything else was simply sub par as far as your name goes. IDK? blunt, sorry.

AND...its heroin? I now see that clear as day, fuck the machines. He was some sort of war vet, battling the demons in the back alley searching for that revenge some how. IDK bro, this shit IS mad layered though, I'll give you that.

Pent - Some dope meanings in every line, "I run my hands up her arms all the way past the cracks in her cheeks
with no safety line to the path of her peak." And... "A cynical humorist might call this a freeze frame. " Shit like that. I don't know the word for it, almost double meanings, or innuendo?? Anyways, some lines as far as flow go were rather simple, but the "Innuendo's" I spoke of kept me very intrigued. I see a man (You) struggling to write, fighting a uphill battle and explaining in dope and different ways over and over again the pain not having the proper inspiration causes. In the end, you realize the woman you're searching for (the inspiration to write) IS the struggle, and you deal with it writing through it. In NBA terms, we call this "shooting through a slump", and I think you did.


vote - Pohfig

To me, honestly, I can't connect either verse to the topic, which is weird, but I can't fault you either or I fault you both. Flow was pents, more simple but at the same time equally as beautiful in terms of word choice shit. I liked his take more though, maybe because I'm walking away from reading it feeling like it didn't completely fly over my head. Where with Soul, I feel like he simply didn't convey enough, or do his part to leave me a couple more clues for where he took his verse. As a writer I don't mind leaving shit open for interpretation, as a reader I do. But, in the end, as a writer and reader, I simply enjoyed Pent's verse more.