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Old 05-18-2019, 02:01 AM   #2
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gotta say baby, this was some nicely worded craftsmanship
I dont know if Im developing a slur due to reading this but it was dope
that opening is butter on freshly heated toast, I love that.
dope work, very dope work..
everything melted together towards the end and hits a poetic end
twas like a swan going out only to be mistaken for a duck & pow.
anyway

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forming a bond. cutthroat. synovial strong
childhood friends like famous rockstars. so many gone
kurt, latore, shakur, shuffling through on the browser
normalcy's paused. quiet as space. jupiters powder
going through life thinking, how do i amount?
this section here really hit a tone for me
great work
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