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Old 05-09-2019, 09:29 AM   #6
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mvgt - suthveli dropped some bars, and the stories progression went well with the rhyme intensity. all in all the final effect was a bit stronger than his opponents because of the amount of material in the piece. really heated up in the middle tho i was feelin it. nice work.

sharp - you almost did a little more with less here, but i guess maybe i wasn't in a poetic kind of mood.. well written piece, enjoyed the quotation ending. that's different, not sure if even allowed.. but different. nice approach. i think with a few more lines and some kind of character struggle it would have pulled an easy /v . nice piece
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