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Old 04-28-2019, 02:33 PM   #13
Jabari Black
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you passionless whore. I'ma leave you buried, smashed in the floor.
when u die, there won't even be pallbearers. no one carries cash anymore.

(Lol I like this one except the set up. Passionless whore was weird but the concept and punch pretty good)

you bring that extra chrome, wave it around & behave with the weirdness.
bro we get it, you're down as fuck.. it's a distinct facial appearance.

(This is okay. Works but the way you connected it kinda basic)

look dawg we know u need attention. and most of your lies forgiven.
nobody condemns your lifestyle.. just the crackhouse you tried to live in.

(I don’t really see what you were going for here. I don’t get what the flip is here)

ur a slave to text, they call u legend & it makes me wanna stomp ya face in.
honestly... it's because ur portrayed isn't worthy of compensation.

(I didn’t care for this one. Portrayed is a slick wordplay but I doesnt really work both ways. Poor trade meaning works but the wording doesn’t really work with the portrayed meaning.)

always cave to the cops. in your case, I'm known to grab the Mac faster.
usually down to throw hands.. but it's always a strict nine for a rat bastard.

(Lol this probably went over heads cus this was fire to me. Set up was well except for if you using a Mac in the setup and a 9 in the second line - make sure there’s a transition. That’s nit picky but I’m always consistent bout that. Anyways strict 9 was dope. Set it up well)

insecure about your love life.. I'd hate to leave you stuck in these thoughts.
spoiler: that's what u shoulda done, to keep your bitch from sucking me off.

(The execution here was very messy - at best)

keep her outta pocket.. when I fuck ya girl I hit harder in motion
if she ends up pregnant & askin for money I'll kickstarter abortion

(Lmao I like this. Wording in the punch wasn’t perfect but I like the concept a lot)

I'll put you on display, I'm vicious af.. you just can't tell cuz I'm chill.
you keep showcasing & my revolver won't drop a shell when I kill.

(This was just okay at best. I get the casing/shell flip but the punch just doesn’t work both ways. I like the creativity but execution is lacking)



“Real Spit”....what a stupid name. Gayest shit I’ve heard in my life, fam..Jesus!
I cringe so hard at that “Monicker”...you’d think the nerdiest white man screamed it

(Lol a part of me laughed but this wasn’t good to me. The wp is a reach to me)

Was gonna smash your chick but EVERYONE has...The girl is just whilin’, friend
Would’ve left you with a Sorbet...but it’s obvious the nasty bitch needs more than her palate cleansed

(That sorbet wp has been done before on this site. Otherwise wording pretty good but just seen the concept down which takes away from the punch.)

You have that poor girl turning to drink. But I can’t blame her...so never mind that
Got the bitch so ‘half in the bag’...Finny’s expecting her to send her fries back

(Lol pretty good. I like the punch. I think you coulda found a more concise way to word the punch than the “finnys expecting her to...” part (prob didn’t have to mention finny at all for that punch) but that’s sorta a preference thing. Pretty good)

No one dominant as Cash...You HAD to know you’d probably get smacked
If ANY voter is For Real...then I guarantee they’re the EXACT opposite of that

(This is okay. The punch works but it’s very basic to me)

Act like I won’t blast you, I Double Dare you. Fam...stunt and you dead
If the Nickelodeon trouble...cause no slime coming out when them cans dump on his head

(Fire to me. The double dare punch/tie in in the set up is dope. Nickelodeon works for me. Cans dump on his head is dope. His just a really well put together line)

He taking his girl out for fancy meals like she ain’t 3 bills...dude’s kiddin’ himself
Quit fuckin’ with me, kid...You been droppin’ 100 on a Pig wayyyy before Blue did it to Zelph

(Nice. Well worded - good punch)

He’s BROKE. But I’ll still rob him for talking...Dude face it, it’s over
Talk Backwards and I’ll make you ‘Run your little green with the stick’...Luke training with Yoda

(Ambitious punch. This one had a lot of potential. I got it landing but coulda been heavy. The set up was good. Talk backwards was a good tie in. The run your little green with the stick got wording issues though. Works well for the robbing meaning but kinda a stretch for the yoga meaning. A lot here to carry the punch though)

From RB HOF to a Netcees no name ...Lol...but homie’s like “HELL NO, I’M A STAR!!!”
At the Lime only Real recognize Real. Which makes sense...Cause nobody else knows who you are

(The punch was simple but this is a quality personal. Good angle. Like is said, the punch was kinda simple but it still landed. Pretty good overall)


Overall I think this was a very close battle. Real was the more consistent out of the two. Not many bad misses and the strict 9 was a high point in the verse. Cashius started out slow af imo. He heated up about halfway through the battle and finished his verse with some heavy material. Out of the top 4 bars, Cashius probably had 3 with the Nickelodeon bar being the lotb. I think Spit had more jabs but Cashius had the heavier punches.

I got Cashius edging this

Mvgt Cashius
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