[Sharp]

really dug the tone of this drop. fit the topic incredibly well.


Its an intricate notion,one idea or emotion that can instigate motion
A token of hoping;one drop against the weight of the infinite ocean
With an explosion; the ocean persists with potent waves, hits after hits
Soaking, frozen and broken, he drifts eying eloping from the fierceness that exists
this transition of was sliiiick, read it over again to make sure i caught it all.


He fights back and he spars, he attacks and he scars, he guards, darts and goes straight for the heart
The others can see, the momentum builds and more ones start to believe, then one becomes three
definitely the climax of the piece, and the writing fit it perfectly - the more frequent rhyming made it a lot more tense and feel faster



felt like it kinda fell off towards the end but didnt disappoint, just reached the logical open-ended conclusion. cool stuff. I feel like very few really can write the perfect lengthened piece, felt like this one was short enough where i'd want to read more, which beats the shit out of one that's too long. keep at it, this was dope.