Ryno has a solid bar here. The angle is kinda weird saying that his girl left cus he lost a text battle but you made it work lol. You set up the punch well. The Stranger things wp was slick to me. People have done stranger things bars but that’s doesn’t make the punch played just because you’re using the same reference. I don’t think the “not even 11 could fine her” was a strong way to end the punch but it was decent. Overall pretty good bar.
Dom, this was a well crafted bar, but a concept I’ve seen done before. The set up was great because it allowed you to do a nice little flip on “the switchblade catchy”. “Switchblade a little catchy” is clever. You probably wouldn’t use the phrase for a rusty knife in real life but it’s not a big deal here since that’s not the whole punch. My issue with the punch is that the it’ll get stuck in your head has been done before. That’s the main part of
Your punch and it just didn’t feel fresh. However, overall, I think Dom’s bar was good as well.
Overall, I think both guys had great execution. Dom would have been able to catch most guys slipping just based on his wording and execution alone. I think ryno came equally crisp in this one though. I got Ryno edging this slightly with the very solid wordplay and fresher concept.
Mvgt Ryno
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