Mr. J, long time no see. I am glad you are still in the pen game and can see you are still at it as ever. You don't really exhibit any rust, so I assume you have been sharpening your lyrical knife. I bet you have improved as well. This was enjoyable, there are some highlights. I do wish to see how far you've pushed yourself, as I feel this isn't even close to where you are at now.
This couplet was beautiful-
my pen ridiculous, a pharcyde gallery passin me by.
all I see are clouds like cataracts in the eye.
There is almost this sense of poetic musings in your writing now, and less focused on lyrical fixation, which is nice to see. You've mixed up and relaxed your writing.
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