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Old 04-05-2019, 02:40 PM   #13
Jabari Black
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Miss Netcees you got a lot of work to do. Just needs a lot more complexity, both in the concept, wording - all of that. I see some slight improvements, but got some ways to go.

Cred this was fire af. Set it up well by alluding to dumping his body. 2 piece lay you out was dope af, but I though “before you hit the water” was a dope way to end the punch l since it plays off the set up. Well put together punch. Only critique i got is you typically a little more complex in your rhyme scheme and flow, but it ain’t a big deal. Overall, dope.

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