Ay Allen, I’m very intrigued to how you knew Sierra was in the back of s garbage truck lmao. Anyways the wp was slick af, and that’s what carried the bar. Wording was concise here. Only issue I have with the punch is I think the “belongs in the back of a garbage truck” was kind of a lackluster way to end the punch. It wasn’t anything wrong with it technically speaking but it just seemed like a basic way to end the punch. I guess you didn’t have much leeway because no one else woulda know wtf a Sierra was I’d you didn’t mention garbage truck lol. Overall good punch.
Spree I don’t think this was your best work personally. Starting with the wordplay, shortening a already one syllable name even shorter is a reach imo. But beyond that, the execution was sloppy imo. You got the forclosure wp, which is pretty crisp, but the “she pays my mortgage” is a very loose association. Like that’s not what’s a forclosure is - it’s just a similar word association. Also the she pays my mortgage when I give her dick is just a awkward phrase, diss in general.
Thought this would be a lot closer but I think spree had an off week. I got Allen taking this one pretty comfortably.
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