this read pretty smoothly and I normally trip over multis. I'm gathering this is all coming from you and saying your piece, but not exactly stream of thought, though there's a real cohesion to it. Like, you can draw a line 'I'm thirty, I'm FINE' to the DM stuff, which was funny. Felt the piece as a whole was the perfect length, where I could stand to read more, but you got everything you needed to say out.
Noticed a lot of small, telling things that kind of give me the sense of self-reflection that is the least bit melancholic but with good humor. Big standouts for me were:
to pass the backasswards lackluster backbuster jackass that is time.
"I'm thirty, I'm FINE!"
I'm mostly the ghostly joker barred in viking folklore that signed with TalkMore,
There's a real difference in tone from viking folklore to TalkMore (which I googled), but it holds together really well
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