Lmao ayo Flow that punch was dope af. Punch was funny af, the flip was clean af, the wording was crisp and precise. Yeah this was dope - no critiques from me.
Inc, not taking anything away from your prior work, but this is EASILY the best concept I’ve seen from you. Went for a really complex bar, weaving in the Bible/Jesus/Veritas concept with the Red C/EU concept.
I think the word associate alone is dope. When you get the the execution, there’s some wording issues though. The Red Sea/RedC flip doesn’t really relate back to Flow well, and if I does it’s not clear based on wording. So like with that wording it’s not clear what splitting his red c means for the shooting flow meaning. Same thing with from the EU. It plays on the RedC concept but in terms of the shooting flow meaning, does it mean you shoot him in Europe, shoot him from Europe, etc?
Overall, I love the concept, liked the bar. I think you’re growing as a writer and with a little more experience, you’d have been able to flip this into a nasty triple entendre.
Anyways, dope battle. Inc coulda caught a lot of people slipping with his bar, but Lars was in his bag this week.
Mvgt Flow
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