ok cool battle. you guys both really took a dope take on the topic imo.
deadman - ya this was a monster of a verse. I think when you write like this, tbh no one is capable of defeating you. the structure and flow were amazing. when I read verses I hear them in my head, and this sounded incredible. and the content was really stellar. got inside the mind of a spy and had all the elements anyone could ask for. best verse you have dropped in this league thus far if you ask me.
patrown- you came way too short. not sure if you just didn't have the opportunity to write more or you thought dead wasn't showing. either way this verse wasn't fleshed out enough to compete. you had some really nice lines in there though,
we breathe in deep, allowing pupil's to focus
choking on our own fumes, flesh eaten by locusts
I liked that. just needed to write more. either way you ran into a monster so that's a tough break.
vote- deadman
good battle guys. thank you for the reads.
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