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Old 03-06-2019, 01:22 AM   #17
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So Lars, or Diablo, not your best work.
Frankly I'm a little bored by this account of humans beginning to walk and hunt and mate.
Technically it's fairly sound per usual.

Master Rock, you're kind of all over the map with your verse.
This part was very generic:
at an expense, the ties that bind, rewind, remind me of every bit of crime, every bit of shine, every bit of what is mine condensed

And this part is poorly written:
the motherland it all relative to it all our trace

Not liking either verse but I'm gonna give it to V/ Lars for some smoother wording.
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