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Old 03-04-2019, 04:30 AM   #3
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Boooooy u ugly asf, pockets stuck in a rut, chicks rarely exchange w/ this fake
If a bitch saw ‘Dyn & dashed’...it’s cos she knew one way or another she’d pay for the date
Heh cool. Flipped well.
It’s a storm comin if I’m dumpin, either get out the way or ur ass gettin slayed
Sprayin this lame! The ‘bulldogs runnin through this square’ like they’re avoidin the rain
Ehhh. The wp is OK but the flip is light.
Shit is insane...No games, surround em w/ lasers & follow it up w/ 5 claps
This ain’t Galaga, once ur beamed up there’s no chance of u gettin ur life back
niiice. Really good.
The old me showed mercy, now if a spirit needs to be lifted I’m the 1st one they call
We all go through a phase...but when I’m finished he’ll be able to do it through walls
Set up and worded well. Phase wp was done a lot many years ago but I haven't seen for a while, combined with the wording this was cool
Speak when spoken too nigga, make a peep & u’ll meet ur maker overnight
Blast em twice! If u venture souls gonna journey waaaaay beyond the afterlife
Not bad
Dawg r u drunk? Clown ur hospital bound if u thought u could fuck w/ me
Clutch & squeeze! Think AA, he’ll be hesitant to pick the cans up after recovery
Feel like this should be played but I don't recall it, it was fresh to me and was a good line. Worded well again. Nice multis on this one too - better than previous bars, good job.
I pull strings in the hood, 1 phone call & he’ll be on a mission up to God
If he pulls strings in the hood...i bet my life he’s hiding headphones on the job
Creative. I'd probably call them 'cords' rather than 'strings' but eh, it was a fresh idea, not bad.
I’m the people’s champ, the stadium’ll fill up just to see this dudes skull leakin
You can’t beat this! Dawg I’ll slam a bow above ya head like it’s all star weekend
I don't get this. Google didn't help me.
Text ain’t dead, these old heads swarmin threads like some vultures
I’ll prove I’m no poser! Bitch I’ve got enough gunplay to shift you AND ‘Tha Culture’
Nah too simple. Nothingish. Attack/gunplay bars need a good wordplay or hard punch or at least a slick rhyme scheme or something
Kill it squirt, ya raps r dirt & the big names leavin ya verses merked
Fuckin twerp! Ur the Tesla of text, u BARELY get recognition for ya ‘current work’
Ehhh nah. Maybe if you'd set it up like "My bars get quoted from years ago..."



Act out im gettin direct..Whateva gang u claim take 1 for the set
When one strap suspend from the shoulder like Ralph Breaks The Internet
Eh. The only part with a double meaning is "strap". Needed a harsher/punchier flip than a "like..."
Subtract the loose ends, they will have to carry one--im reducing
God when i shoot this 'Iron in Vain', it aint a shot giving Infusions
'shot' and 'vein/vain' wp are pretty played. Iron/nutrient is fresher. The way you combined it all made the wp OK to me but the flip is light and this could've been set up/worded better. You're saying you're shooting in vain (i.e. without success)
The guns stay wit Victor, that mean silencer i keep it on the Hush
Extendo i drop the shit--then start shaking the handle more then a courtesy flush
LMAO. Good here. Like this.
New clip long as a dreadlock--quit the pretend or we find whatever bar he in
The can i bust stay smoking, the wrong movement they better hope Rastafarian
Not bad. can-I-bus'/canabis is a bit of a reach phonetically
See u & ya bitch, damn! What i got by deceit...u'll think im pulling a scam
Chopper skyview the street--I get live, it aint the news covering a Traffic Jam
Nice! this is good. I like the set up wp too.
A funeral the only way u leaving..black hurse extend for them to grieve in
From the right angle, u get ya fabric threaded with the needle like Modern Weaving
Nah. I can't fathom "fabric threaded with the needle" being used in any context besides weaving.
To mention..Week 3 spoke u wanted Dy now, they should have paid it attention
Now im slicing at a risk, they thinking im the one ask for Suicide Prevention
Nah. Risk/wrist doesn't work at all for me. "you wanted Dy/Suicide" was OKish
What u sale corrupt, proper with ya gunbars, wwe kno u aint tough enough
Shots turn a shirt inside out, then i leave u hanging by the tag like OfferUp
Leave you hanging by the tag/OfferUp was cool. Set could've been better - how could shots turn a shirt inside out? You would've done better to abandon this as a gunbar and just say you'd grab his shirt and pin him up. The main elements of the bar are fine, it's still a cool, just could've easily been made better I think
U kno my temperpedic...a mattress never felt too appealing
When the peaceful in your stomach, it can leave u with a inside gut feeling
Hmmmm had potential but not quite. "Peaceful" isn't really addressed in your flip... maybe something like "Peaceful in your stomach, but you gonna be feeling nauseous"
Drastic! If it's static, I can pay your old bitch the extra taxes
Beam, I let ya X-ray your insides...she givin study for a MRI in Practice
Liked the ex-ray idea. Not bad.



Well this is unhelpful asf but I gotta give it to Ryno. Sorry mods. Dyna had traffic jam and courtesy flush that were dope vs the only really heavy one from Ry being Galaga, but 2 vs 1 big hits doesn't outweigh that Ryno's wp was generally worded better all throughout - that's a big one for me.

V/ Ryno
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