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Vertias had an unusual approach I wasn't expecting. Where he wrote whatever came to mind regardless if it tied in an then threw a punch in after a list of single rhyme multis. However after rereading this a few times. I don't even know what a vin strip is, fav bar was the pigeon nest. I hated the set up to the closer but the ending was ok.

I'll be honest I'm not a huge fan of this style. Feels like how I used to write 15 years ago. .

Cynic
Yours is most definitely more a standard I'm accustomed too. Set up and punch. Just hated your angles for the most part .. no offence. They seem to be corny or played even when I can't think of a example... Like the IRS. I mean I am going to give you the quote but I just feel like that should and probably will be in the archives.

Anyway opening bar I hated. How gay you are as a set up wasnt ever going to go well. The mouse click shit was actually quite a dope set up. But then you came in with a punch that I didn't get. It could be good but I can't be arsed to go into last week's to cross examine the reference. I'll give you benefit of doubt but tbh it still didn't come across like it was executed with any sting. It's as said I think is surely mad played but as I can't quote an example I'll pass it. Probably your best bar for set up and punch.

The last two bars. Urgh. Well I get them. I just think they come across statementish, corny, uncreative. I dunno. I'm not trying to be a dick. Just didn't enjoy tbh. But the ideas behind them were there I'd just take them in an entirely opposite way. But that's me.


Veritas gets it for creativity

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