I thought this was a decent read, Concrete.
Was a sufficient topical you choose to write about. Had all the essentials for a easy read, and good flow. I enjoy the preaching topic, is quite good to read about. The setting of the story in relating to preaching; - is quite silly; - it doesn't need to happen. I would suggest a lower man than a preacher go preach. However, in this written it's not a preacher but someone of lower detail - which is okay. I don't see anything wrong with this. It's written quite well. You tend to be a bit too simple at times; but that's okay. You have a decent use of syntax which helped the story. I would just choose a different setting next time; - because it reads silly; - lol. But that was a okay read. Nice one, Concrete. Keep writing.!
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