Hello, DMS...
I suppose this was a decent little read, allow me to leave feed-back.
This was decent to a extent. I enjoyed the subtle narration you displayed with your writing skills and forte'. You instances where you hit a stride, others where you could've done a bit better in places. I enjoyed that this was a car-ride you were on. Some of these lines could be a bit better, such as 'path becoming unique' how does the path become unique. You have to show us rather than saying that. But that was okay. I know later you show us in a way, but things could be better. Some of the lines were funny, but it was decent. At the end; there's a mystery...but you don't foreshadow what the mystery was about in anyway..was the mystery the read itself..and you just lead us on to this..lol..anyways..it was decent..I understand this piece..things could be better..if you want to advance..maybe read more books..write more..lol..but this was decent..niice one..keep writing..
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